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deleted out of embarassment from commentary from /r/premed... apparently it's terrible. reported thread for deletion myself.
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I like your ideas and theme but your writing/prose, in my opinion at least, is incredibly pretentious (especially in your opening paragraphs). You of all people, DJT, should know that simple language can be incredibly effective.
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Great point. I'll start editing.
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Too much rhetoric and lacks content. If I were you I'd use experiences to support the rhetoric from your intro paragraph and intro sentences of every body paragraph.
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What's going on here? I don't understand. Who deleted what thread?
Clearly the Donald posted his personal statement and then deleted it.
My advice, dont ever post a draft of your PS on a public forum. You can of course send it to internetters in PMs, but you dont want that much info about you being public.
My advice, dont ever post a draft of your PS on a public forum. You can of course send it to internetters in PMs, but you dont want that much info about you being public.
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Language can truly be simple when it is composed of one word and five letters.
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